Will anyone think I'm a dick if I correct the grammar/spelling in some of these? I know I'm regarded as a little too critical, but "extract revenge on" makes no sense. I'm guessing it is supposed to say "extract revenge from"? Even then it's a clunky turn of phrase. In-game Pokemon text is casual but it's also grammatical and largely correct. A few of the mistakes are obviously typos, I've no problem with those.
I won't make a move unless I get some indication that I'm not in the wrong here, I know people get defensive over use-of-language and I'm not looking to start a(nother) fight.
I voted for #1 and #9.
I'm still a little iffy about #1, you wouldn't normally say "something inhabits something to...", but it's good in all other respects and would be very easy to tweek. It could be that Helios is from somewhere where the dialect would flow using 'inhabits ...to', it's not terribly wrong, it makes sense, it's just very unusual and little jarring.