http://www.smogon.com/dp/pokemon/bibarel
- Ok, so basically, what I did, was I cleared up a lot of the /itis, fixed up the EVs on the Super Fang set (now called Bulky Beaver), and I added Tauntarel. In case you're wondering why I changed the original Super Fang set name, I did it because I added Tauntarel in the peer edit, and I wanted them to look like different variations of Super Fang sets.
- The only set I didn't touch at all was the "Physical Attacker" set.
- I put more explanation in the CB set, because newer players are generally the ones reading these analyses, so I felt that the choices needed some more explanation.
- I took off Superpower in the special attacking set, because it doesn't have any chance at 2HKOing Blissey, which is what it was there for, and Superpower is suicide when Simple is Bibarel's ability, since it makes the defense drop -2 as opposed to the normal -1. I put Super Fang there instead since it seemed like the best alternative to Grass Knot, and it's a much better option if anyone reading the analysis wants to try out Bibarel in OU.
- I fixed the EVs in the Bulky Beaver set a bit. I saw Mekkah's reasoning for EVs as leftovers no. +1, so I did that, taking 4 EVs from attack and putting them in there. Also note that I took off Stealth Rock from this set, since it was an absurd option. I put it in the Other Options section. I also took off Defense Curl, because it's just so obviously inferior to Amnesia that there's no point in it being there. I put that in Other Options as well. I also added some new information about Swagger. (Unaware keeping the opponent's attack boosts the same when they hit themselves, but doesn't count when they hit Bibarel). Hopefully that makes it more of an option now.
- I basically compressed my explanation about Tauntarel and kept it to 1 paragraph, since I didn't want to go overboard.
- I put Double Team as an other option if the person reading it is playing with no evasion clause in some tournament or something. I can remove it if you guys want, but I put it there just in case since it's one of Bibarel's few boosting moves.
- I added more explanation about the EVs for this edit, because I'm not sure, but they looked like they were quite rushed. I made it much easier for a newer player to understand.
- I honestly completely revamped the opinion. I personally feel that the thing has potential, and the original author may not have, and I respect whoever did though. I basically made look a lot more inviting to use, and gave advice on ways for it to not get outclassed in OU, and for it to whoop things in UU. The opinion is the most important part of the analysis IMO, and if the opinion is so negative toward the pokemon, people are very unlikely to use it, so I wanted to change that. No offense to whoever wrote it though.
- I fixed up the counters section as well. Saying that "anything with a modicum of defense can take it down" seems to be really contradictory to Super Fang. I made it clear that nothing likes switching into Super Fang, especially in UU, where most of the walls don't have very good recovery, and that Ghosts are evidently the best counter. Rotom is the #1 counter for Bibarel.
Alright, so tell me what you think! I hope I did good, and if not, my excuse is that it was my first day. :P
I'll give this an edit on the SCMS once this gets enough replies and editing.
EDIT: Went with Phquoph's suggestions. I merged Taunt/Bulky into one set, but I went and made it 2 separate paragraphs to make it look a lot more clear. I put Substitute as an option on the "Physical Attacker" set. I put the sets in better order as well. Hope that helped.
Alright, so I thought I might as well try my hand at peer editing, and this is my first one ever, so I'm officially a newbie writer. :]
- Ok, so basically, what I did, was I cleared up a lot of the /itis, fixed up the EVs on the Super Fang set (now called Bulky Beaver), and I added Tauntarel. In case you're wondering why I changed the original Super Fang set name, I did it because I added Tauntarel in the peer edit, and I wanted them to look like different variations of Super Fang sets.
- The only set I didn't touch at all was the "Physical Attacker" set.
- I put more explanation in the CB set, because newer players are generally the ones reading these analyses, so I felt that the choices needed some more explanation.
- I took off Superpower in the special attacking set, because it doesn't have any chance at 2HKOing Blissey, which is what it was there for, and Superpower is suicide when Simple is Bibarel's ability, since it makes the defense drop -2 as opposed to the normal -1. I put Super Fang there instead since it seemed like the best alternative to Grass Knot, and it's a much better option if anyone reading the analysis wants to try out Bibarel in OU.
- I fixed the EVs in the Bulky Beaver set a bit. I saw Mekkah's reasoning for EVs as leftovers no. +1, so I did that, taking 4 EVs from attack and putting them in there. Also note that I took off Stealth Rock from this set, since it was an absurd option. I put it in the Other Options section. I also took off Defense Curl, because it's just so obviously inferior to Amnesia that there's no point in it being there. I put that in Other Options as well. I also added some new information about Swagger. (Unaware keeping the opponent's attack boosts the same when they hit themselves, but doesn't count when they hit Bibarel). Hopefully that makes it more of an option now.
- I basically compressed my explanation about Tauntarel and kept it to 1 paragraph, since I didn't want to go overboard.
- I put Double Team as an other option if the person reading it is playing with no evasion clause in some tournament or something. I can remove it if you guys want, but I put it there just in case since it's one of Bibarel's few boosting moves.
- I added more explanation about the EVs for this edit, because I'm not sure, but they looked like they were quite rushed. I made it much easier for a newer player to understand.
- I honestly completely revamped the opinion. I personally feel that the thing has potential, and the original author may not have, and I respect whoever did though. I basically made look a lot more inviting to use, and gave advice on ways for it to not get outclassed in OU, and for it to whoop things in UU. The opinion is the most important part of the analysis IMO, and if the opinion is so negative toward the pokemon, people are very unlikely to use it, so I wanted to change that. No offense to whoever wrote it though.
- I fixed up the counters section as well. Saying that "anything with a modicum of defense can take it down" seems to be really contradictory to Super Fang. I made it clear that nothing likes switching into Super Fang, especially in UU, where most of the walls don't have very good recovery, and that Ghosts are evidently the best counter. Rotom is the #1 counter for Bibarel.
Alright, so tell me what you think! I hope I did good, and if not, my excuse is that it was my first day. :P
I'll give this an edit on the SCMS once this gets enough replies and editing.
EDIT: Went with Phquoph's suggestions. I merged Taunt/Bulky into one set, but I went and made it 2 separate paragraphs to make it look a lot more clear. I put Substitute as an option on the "Physical Attacker" set. I put the sets in better order as well. Hope that helped.
