<p>Gale Wings gives Talonflame priority on any Flying-type move, making it an excellent revenge killer and sweeper. Brave Bird is its primary offensive option, easily OHKOing Pokemon such as Volcarona and Blaziken, as well as Azumarill after the latter has used Belly Drum. OHKOing Azumarill after a BD isn't really impressive...OHKOing Volcarona and Blaziken with an SE move isn't either. Emphasize how Brave Bird is its means of revenge killing. Flare Blitz deals with most of the Steel-types that resist Brave Bird and some Electric-types on the switch-in. This is very obvious. Mention specific targets in the metagame! Don't be so general. Swords Dance pumps up Talonflame's power to respectable levels, making Brave Bird powerful enough to OHKO most offensive Pokemon that don't resist it at +2. SD is a boosting move. Of course it makes Talonflame more powerful. I mean, anyone who knows what SD does could tell you that. What's important is that the reader knows what SD is useful for. Does it make Talonflame a sweeper? Does it simply make it powerful enough to compete? Just scrap the rest of the sentence and tell me that. Roost and big HP investment make Talonflame a great switch-in to Volcarona, Scizor, and Blaziken, provided Stealth Rock is off the field. Tailwind is another useful move that gets priority from Gale Wings and allows Talonflame's team to revenge kill fast threats that even Talonflame can't. This is choppy. Also, you don't /really/ state the ultimate usefulness of it. Its most useful because it enables slower teammates to shine. The revenge killing things in a pinch deal is cool...but that's Talonflame's job. You can mention a few things, but there really isn't a whole lot faster than it that Talonflame can't revenge kill. Will-O-Wisp might seem a bit of out of place Exon such an offensive set, but it's Talonflame's best answer to some of its best checks and counters, such as Tyranitar, physically defensive Hippowdon, and Aerodactyl. It shouldn't really seem of place. Just skip that whole intro and simply state that it's useful to cripple Tyranitar, Hippowdon, and Aerodactyl, which can normally deal with it fairly well. Also, I don't see Aerodactyl taking a boosted Brave Bird all that well, j/s.</p>
<p>60 Speed EVs allow Talonflame to outspeed Jolly Excadrill. Anything else that Talonflame would want to hit with Flare Blitz is slower, so the rest of the EVs are put into bulk while the HP EVs allow Talonflame to switch in two times with Stealth Rock up. The Speed can be pumped up to outspeed even Heliolisk or Sucker Punch Mega Absol if those Pokemon are of concern. That's really elaborate to mention a simple EV spread. Change this to 'The EVs focus on Talonflame's strong points while enabling it to outrun Jolly.' Heliolisk honestly can't even take two Brave Birds or a Flare Blitz. It's not bulky at all. Mega Absol will also beat you either way, as Sucker Punch has more priority than Gale Wings Brave Bird (at least afaik). Sharp Beak is the preferred item as otherwise the recoil overwhelms Talonflame quickly, but Life Orb is better for those that need the extra power. Okay honestly Life Orb seems like garbage. This is a Pokemon that's weak to Stealth Rock with two recoil-incurring STAB attacks. Life Orb's power isn't /that/ relevant, while the longevity it gains by running Sharp Beak is much more significant. Rapid Spin or Defog support is a must. Starmie, Scizor, and Excadrill are the best Pokemon for this job. Talonflame also needs Pokemon able to deal with its major checks, Tyranitar, Hippowdon, and Rotom-W. Ferrothorn checks all of those Pokemon and helps Talonflame sweep by providing entry hazards. Ferrothorn is really out of place on the offensive teams you find Talonflame on. It'd be more prudent to mention something like Mega Venusaur, or Gogoat. Lastly, Bulk Up can be used instead of Swords Dance to make Talonflame harder to revenge kill. Use it with Roost and Leftovers. This doesn't tell me why to use Bulk Up. '[...] to make Talonflame harder to revenge kill.' is really vague and tells me nothing. What can't revenge kill it with Bulk Up? Why should I use Leftovers and not Sharp Beak? Honestly, I'm not convinced the extra passive recovery matters all that much with Roost, while such passive boosts make the power increase to Brave Bird all the more significant.</p>