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Of course! Generally speaking, it's best to avoid making so many comments - you don't want to come off like you're lecturing the writer and generally they'll understand the changes and ask questions in the rare cases that they don't understand.
You also make a fair number of unnecessary changes that, while they usually marginally help the flow or structure of the analysis, change the voice and tone of the writing which we try to avoid.
Other than that, it doesn't look like you missed too much from the glance over I gave (keep in mind that we don't like the word "abuse" in the context of a Pokemon taking advantage of something), but you can dial it back a little bit and keep checking.
Also, we prefer that if an analysis already has one amcheck that's been neither implemented nor stamped/corrected, it doesn't get another amcheck. If you check it again after one that's already sitting there, the GP member who eventually gives the official check will likely ignore your post.
You also make a fair number of unnecessary changes that, while they usually marginally help the flow or structure of the analysis, change the voice and tone of the writing which we try to avoid.
Other than that, it doesn't look like you missed too much from the glance over I gave (keep in mind that we don't like the word "abuse" in the context of a Pokemon taking advantage of something), but you can dial it back a little bit and keep checking.
Also, we prefer that if an analysis already has one amcheck that's been neither implemented nor stamped/corrected, it doesn't get another amcheck. If you check it again after one that's already sitting there, the GP member who eventually gives the official check will likely ignore your post.
Let me know if you have any more questions!