Destiny Warrior
also known as Darkwing_Duck
20/10.
Wow...just wow. This blew me away, with all the details.
Keep it up!
Wow...just wow. This blew me away, with all the details.
Keep it up!
I couldn't have said it better myself.Holy fucking balls that was amazing.
heh. Are you guys never pleased? On so many warstories, the main complaint that I can see is that the writer doesn't explain his thought processes thoroughly or sometimes, not at all. Here we have a guy who not only gives us a small essay behind every move he is thinking of making, but also throws in predictions, alternate moves and maths. Too much for you?I appreciate the time and thought you put into this. You detailed at length your thought process, and the percentages and pictures throughout made for a clean presentation.
However, I felt you elaborated too much. I was already turned off when when I saw multiple paragraphs to read before turn one. If you feel you have to do a tl;dr explanation, then it probably is too long to read.
As the battle continued, you broke down even trivial decisions which, for any experienced battler, had obvious conclusions. It's offputting to slog through an entire paragraph when the reader already knows what's coming up next. The unnecessary block of text for obvious turns constantly disrupted the flow of the battle.
A few misplays turned me off as well. Turn 19, as you've already stated, should've been an Earth Power, saving your Nidoking the Shadow Ball from Shanderaa, and also, as you pointed out, all of Nidoking's last Ice Beams should've been Flamethrowers.
The worst misplay was by your opponent, who threw away the battle when it should've ended based on a speed tie if he had thought through his endgame. He sac'ed his Ditto against your Genosekuto, when he should've just sac'ed any of his other three pokemon. He could then send his Ditto back out, transform into Genosekuto, and mash Flamethrower, forcing you to sac your Nidoking. In the end, the winner would've been decided on a coinflip as you sent back in your Genosekuto for a possible sweep with Flamethrower.
Also, this is just a personal preference, but I would've set up SR while Heatran was behind a Sub against Ttar.
All in all, with the misplays and unneeded length, I didn't like this warstory as much as other posters seemed to. However, your effort is noted, and anyone who uses Nidoking is awesome. Just learn to cut out unnecessary words, sentences, and even paragraphs, which will improve all of your writing in general.
7/10
Bolded for emphasis. Writing an essay for every decision, even simple ones, is overdoing it. Just looking at the first turn, it didn't require that lengthy prologue.Here we have a guy who not only gives us a small essay behind every move he is thinking of making, but also throws in predictions, alternate moves and maths. Too much for you?
^ThisThat was possibly the most in depth warstory i've ever read. Comments were fantastic, as was the battle and the formatting. Fun to read and the in-depth nature made it feel complete. Nice battle, though there was a little hax (though not much you can do about that...)
Well done! Hope to see more in the future.
You lose the Balloon whenever you're hit by a direct attack, so yes.Really nice comments, but I wonder why you switched your Heatran out against Gliscor, when you had a Sub up + Balloon, so Gliscor couldnt even break the Sub. Or do you lose the Balloon even if your Sub stays intact?
He's using Choice Band Techniloom (my favorite set! If only it hadn't been for those Shanderas...).And another thing is when you had your Breloom out against Gliscor after using Bullet Seed, you could have used Mach Punch instead of another Bullet Seed. A resisted Mach Punch does 80% of one Seed hit, so it should have been more than enough to deal the last 13% If he had protected, you could just have used Bullet Seed the second round, so you would have been in the same situation.
Are you serious. (Please, stop complaining about people playing DW. It's dumb)Great warstory... Except for one thing.
Tier: Dream World
I would have liked it in standard, but to be honest, I really don't care. It was amazing. Play whatever tier you want, I'll read it. I personally don't mind small essays on moves, as long as the thoughts are coherent. Nothing was tl;dr for me, I enjoyed reading all of it. Your previous post showed me your stories will not turn boring, and I look forward to future warstories. With more posters like you, maybe we can take back what warstories are suppose to be!Great warstory... Except for one thing.
Tier: Dream World